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Good Words. by EveDaniels

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up in the air,
suspended.
is this the closest i'll get
to heaven?

gravity doesn't work
against me,
just yet.

one moment of peace
before i plummet.
You'd never imagine that this was inspired when I [almost] fell rock climbing. :P Luckily my belayer (the one holding the ropes) caught me in time.

In your opinion, do you think that I should separate the piece into stanzas after line four and/or after line seven?
As always when I use lowercase lettering, do you think it added to the poem or should I properly capitalize my lines (and/or title)?
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xXxPunkPixiexXx Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I think you should separate it into stanzas after both line four and seven, it would help it flow a little better :)
But it is simple and beautiful poem, nice job.
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DimefortheDevil Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much! :D
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xXxPunkPixiexXx Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome!
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