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not quite a bird
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up in the air,
suspended.
is this the closest i'll get
to heaven?
gravity doesn't work
against me,
just yet.
one moment of peace
before i plummet.
suspended.
is this the closest i'll get
to heaven?
gravity doesn't work
against me,
just yet.
one moment of peace
before i plummet.
You'd never imagine that this was inspired when I [almost] fell rock climbing. 
Luckily my belayer (the one holding the ropes) caught me in time.
In your opinion, do you think that I should separate the piece into stanzas after line four and/or after line seven?
As always when I use lowercase lettering, do you think it added to the poem or should I properly capitalize my lines (and/or title)?
Luckily my belayer (the one holding the ropes) caught me in time.In your opinion, do you think that I should separate the piece into stanzas after line four and/or after line seven?
As always when I use lowercase lettering, do you think it added to the poem or should I properly capitalize my lines (and/or title)?
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I think you should separate it into stanzas after both line four and seven, it would help it flow a little better 
But it is simple and beautiful poem, nice job.
But it is simple and beautiful poem, nice job.